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BRIEF LIVES
Date: 2017/05/04 21:28 By: bulldust Status: Admin  
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Despite a slew of accusations of alleged steroid abuse by the Bull, needles give me the willies. And boy, is this capital chuck full of needles, needles in the eye. That is hardcore shit.

The first paragraph drew me in with its uncomfortable, slightly graphic imagery. I am also a huge fan of the F word. Continuing onward, however, I found it difficult. It’s the ultimate Goth tale of love between the living and the dead. Yet, I had to read this cap several times to get the gist of it. The scenes jumped around, coffee house to coffee house, present to past, tense to tense, making it hard to follow.

I may not be a bovine of vast intellect, but I’m no dunce. I know dating the dead is a bad plan, especially if it involve needles in the eye and magical semen. Yeah, my Bessie may as well be dead the way she just lays there, but I don’t need a spooge buzz to plow her. And the dude in this cap wasn’t even banging this dead chick. The relationship was empty and pointless, which I guess, ultimately, was entire the point of this cap.

It was interesting and full of intriguing imagery, but challenging to follow.

So ultimately, I have to say no.
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Re:BRIEF LIVES
Date: 2017/05/05 11:21 By: rockefeller Status: Admin  
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When Rocks was twelve he had a crush on Sheila, an older girl who'd been relocated from Atlanta to Chicago via her parents' divorce, a sweet Georgia peach who'd discovered that by taking ten deep breaths and bearing down on the last she could render herself unconscious and, for a short while, be back home. She did this over and over, slumping and shuddering against him where they sat beside each other on the back steps of the house their families shared. Rocks has no idea what ever became of her, though she still visits him in his dreams.

In this amazingly vivid and poignant cap, the MC is a hardcore heroin addict who, probably having fried all his viable veins, eyeballs smack in order to be with his deceased girlfriend, who was also a junkie, and but who fades with the high. They reminisce about good and bad times. Like how, shortly after they met, they scored outside a homeless shelter where she had to help give the dealer a hand job, and which was one of the good times. It's loaded with graphic Trainspotting-esque details, but as seen through the beneedled 1st person eyes of a narrator in various stages of transcendence.

Rocks loved this cap. It's a powerful amalgamation of addiction and relationship, of craving and longing, one of those rare reads that's so good it almost wants to drag The Rockster out of the safety of 3rd person. A cap that reminds us why we read.

Yes!


In the hopes and faith that this one will also floor The Monkey, Rocky's made a couple edits:

leaps upward like a salmon in pain
This simile, very near the top, kind of sucks relative to the many other great ones. Like this one, for example:
“Don't you think,” she said, “this place looks like a cross between the inside of a giant vagina and a Barbie-obsessed seven-year-old's bedroom?”
Maybe consider "like a salmon in heat" instead?

the clouds ouside
outside
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Re:BRIEF LIVES
Date: 2017/05/05 19:37 By: bulldust Status: Admin  
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The Bull may need to sport a dunce cap now. I am many things, and one of those things is apparently dense.

Heroine addiction. Duh!

Rocks, you have opened my eyes (sans the needle). This cap makes a lot more sense to the Bullmeister now.

Therefore, I would like to reverse my no and say yes. Yes, it is very good, it makes sense, and the Bull was being very dumb.

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Re:BRIEF LIVES
Date: 2017/05/05 20:46 By: rockefeller Status: Admin  
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Wow, bro Bove, the Rox is touched. This is the first time he has ever changed anyone's mind, about anything. And not for lack of trying. It takes a mighty big Bull to admit... But hey, now we're both right. This is definitely a great cap.
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