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THE CASTLE ON THE TREE_maybe?
Date: 2018/04/07 20:49 By: tqr Status: Admin  
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Dear Ms. Strina,

I cannot publish THE CASTLE ON THE TREE (as it is now constituted), but I beg you to read on from here and allow me to elaborate as to why because I believe that you deserve a full explanation.

Your writing is so beautiful and at certain moments transcendent. I have just finished reading THE CASTLE ON THE TREE and feel much of it tingling in my old bones. There are lines that I remember reading that took me beyond the physical onto the spiritual plain. Or is it plane? I can never remember. Anyhow. The whole way through I was yes, yes, yes, yes as to the probability of this becoming a capital gain ... even when the heroine returns to the tree house over 20 years later for a prolonged sojourn in Neverland as it were, and the strain this puts upon the reader's suspension of their disbelief was deftly explained away by a sentence you added here or there at just the right moment before terminal doubt was able to creep in. And then this beautiful work of art that had been elevating me from the mundane to the weightlessness of the spirit culminates in a frozen sperm bank donation... I cannot fully explain why, but it just brought it all crashing down. I remember your previous venture WALLS AND STRANGERS suffered from the same too tight turning of the screw, so to speak. Not sure if I am explaining this correctly, but to me the line between pathos and bathos was, as in WALLS AND STRANGERS, fatally crossed again. TCOTT was so close, much closer than WALLS AND STRANGERS, but simply unwound itself at the final reel.

This is such a beautiful work, I think I would publish it if that last paragraph was excised and nothing else done to it. If you have any notion as to how the ending could be changed or tweaked as to preserve the integrity of the whole, I am all ears. I say this because I was entranced until that last para and wonder if some little nudge on my end might spark some golden alchemy on yours. But also understand if it can't... only hoping.

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RESPONSE-->BUSINESS HOTLINE: AHOY RORSCHALK...
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Re:THE CASTLE ON THE TREE_maybe?
Date: 2018/04/09 13:38 By: rockefeller Status: Admin  
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Like we said... and I'd have the VC cut at least part of the opening paragraph as well. It's over written and is likely to deter some from reading into the real meat.
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Re:THE CASTLE ON THE TREE_maybe?
Date: 2018/04/09 17:36 By: tqr Status: Admin  
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point taken old boy. point taken! Perhaps we could get a divinely-inspired capital coming in at 12,000 words even... the world would then fold in on itself as the universe began to contract. If so, I would advocate for the mandatory inclusion of an intentional flaw so as not to offend the Gods! (or the Rockefellers)
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Re:THE CASTLE ON THE TREE_maybe?
Date: 2018/04/10 13:41 By: rockefeller Status: Admin  
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Good Christ, man! It's not a rug. It's just writing. The Gods couldn't care less.
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Re:THE CASTLE ON THE TREE_maybe?
Date: 2018/04/10 13:58 By: tqr Status: Admin  
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Thus Spake Rockzathustra ... Though the Gods may look away, what about the 'fellers?
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