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Date: 2018/01/31 18:04 By: bulldust Status: Admin  
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The Bull is back from his battle with cell phone providers and smartphone manufacturers. Let me tell you, those cell phone companies really piss me off. I had multiple conversations with these people that resulted in nothing. Even after I threatened to trample the kiosk in “Worst Purchase” store, they refused to revive my poor phone. They told me my Samsung Galaxy S (1) was no longer support and would not even let me have the firmware image for it. Finally, the Bullmeister found a website with the ROMs stored, like golden images of days gone by. The phone has been restored, with no help of these bastards that try to persistently make me upgrade. This whole endeavor almost made me lose my shit and go postal on the phone company, which brings me to the subject of this new cap that came in.

First of all, there is nothing new under the sun. We all know that even the most far-fetched speculative fiction harks back to familiar human situations. Star Wars was a groundbreaking movie but largely a retelling of the Japanese movie “The Hidden Fortress”. This is common and expected. So when I started reading this cap, it did not bother me too much that this was a familiar theme.

In the comic book realm, it is a common trope for the horribly disfigured good guy to turn bad, look at Harvey Dent, Two-Face in Batman. That’s what we see here with Lyles. He tried to save a girl, fails and gets horribly burned in the process. The psychological and physical scars take a toll on his personality.

The thing is, the moment he snapped didn’t really make sense to me. Yeah, there was some build up. In fact, there was almost too much groundwork laid out. There was a great deal of expository description, followed by this leap:

On the day of his next therapy session, he sat at his kitchen table, fully clothed in hood and gloves, talking to himself.
“How does that make you feel, Lyles?”
“It makes me feel angry.”
“And how does that make you, Lyles?”
“It makes me feel sad.”
“But how does that make you feel, Lyles?”
“It makes me feel… happy!” Lyles laughed and stood up, catching his own reflection in his microwave.

So, effectively Lyles went from being annoyed that therapy was taking too long, to feeling unresolved about his anger and sorrow, to just suddenly being completely batshit insane. He starts burning little girls in an attempt to save them. But when he does try to save them, he freezes. He moves on from children to anyone he can grab. Soon he forgets that he was supposed to be trying to save his victims.

He eventually ends up burning himself and when his old fire captain finds his body, he states:

“It almost looks like he’s happy,”

Technically, this cap is okay. I think there were only a few commas out of place, a missing “the” and the word lamppost was lamp post. There is nothing wrong with this cap. However, I found nothing spectacular with this cap either. It left me flat. It felt like just another psycho killer story. Too much explanation, too little to be emotionally connected to. I could not really sympathize with Lyles. I couldn’t feel his human condition.

So, unfortunately, no. This needs to be more relatable before it is ready for the Monkey.
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